User blog comment:ADVENTURETIMEFREAK^.^/The Marriage Of Flame Princess And Finn/@comment-5133095-20130605185908

Okay...umm let me give you some advice, It could use some propper spacing in...well everywhere. Because it kinda lures me away if the Fic is in a big block of text. BUT it dosen't kill the story, it would just look a lot better if it had some.

As an example, If the scene changes to another location, add a line break. it would look a little less confusing to the readers. Second add a line break or some kind of break when another person starts talking. Example.

'''"Finn, did you put on clean underwear?" Jake asked his sibling, placing his hands on his hips'''

'''"What kind of question is that?" Finn replyed,'''

Now if the character continues to talk you don't add a break for that. Instead just continue writing until another character speaks.

New speaker, new line.